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What Everybody Should Know… About How to Get a Job in Truck Driving

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1. Ell-oh-vee-ee(: says:

   February 18, 2010 at 1:39 am

   What should I title my story…..?
   “Ugh,” I grunted, awaking groggy after ten hours of peaceful sleeping. My eyes took awhile to focus as all my senses finally kicked in. “Clink, Clink, Clink,” the heavy rain pounded on the top of the metal roof of the trailer like a machine gun being fired. I, my family, and my dog were currently on vacation in the hill country of South Texas, practically in the middle of nowhere. The rain was starting to give me a headache, but I slowly lifted my head and rose to my feet. Immediately something eye-catching was brought to my attention. It was my parents, kneeling over my dog, Brandy, the closest thing to a sister as I will ever get. “What’s go-going on,” I mumbled under my breath, but apparently loud enough for my parents to hear. “There is something wrong with Brandy, she’s not doing well,” my mom shakily replied. I waited a little bit longer for more information, but never got any. It was silent and I inferred that they didn’t know what was wrong with her either.
   Endless hours passed as me and my family started to give up any hope of my companion, Brandy, surviving. My hands were starting to shake, like they were having miniature convulsions and my heart felt like it was about to crack right down the middle. I was speechless; nothing would come out of my mouth just as if my lips had been sealed up, like a person’s jacket zipper and locked with a key. I, my mom and dad, and my brother sat with Brandy doing many things trying to figure out what was wrong with her. At one point my mom put her hand in front of Brandy’s face almost as if she was waving hi in close-up mode. She didn’t respond at all. There was no sign of her even noticing her mom’s hand in front of her face. Worse than that, as each second passed it looked like she was losing all of her six senses one by one. The smell of salty tears enveloped the little room and faint sniffling was ringing in my ears. Six words were blaring in my head. Just like if I had turned up my iPod as high as it could go. “Why is this happening to me?”
   Finally after sitting there, acting like this would be the last time we would see her, my mom arose to her feet, and informed us that since we weren’t doing anything about this situation, she was going to go talk to the landowner, and also my dad’s friend, Dean, and ask him where the nearest animal hospital was. She threw on a quick not-matching outfit and tennis shoes and ran out the door, the keys to the truck handy. The sound of the engine got distant and distant. Each second passed like a ticking clock and after five minutes she and, Dean, were back sweat pelting down their tomato red faces. “Okay I’ll drive you down there, you just have to put Brandy in the truck and I’ll do the rest,” Dean hurriedly said faster than I could have told him hi. “Dad hurry,” I practically yelled. He leaned down to pick up Brandy and it was as if a big whammy of sense got knocked into her. She was back to normal just the way she should be. This was amazing, a big relief to my almost damaged heart. A sigh of relief went around the room, passing to each person like the kiddy game we used to play: telephone. Brandy looked around aimlessly not knowing what had just happened moments before. She was in La-La-Land and luckily made it out alive. We were all relieved that no one’s heart stopped beating, not necessarily Brandy’s but any one of us! To this day it is still a mystery of what really happened to the beloved Brandy.
   From that moment on I will always cherish every moment I have with my dog/sister Brandy. A reality check knocked me and my family nearly off our feet with no warning. I’m actually kind of thankful that I went through this memorable experience because now I realize that nobody lives forever. You have to live your life slowly, taking in every small detail so you won’t miss a thing. Don’t overlook any chance you can get to share love with your family, friends, or pets. We usually don’t realize everybody will pass away sooner or later so we don’t actually appreciate the gift of friends, love, and life.

   *What did you think of it….give me feedback…What should I change and were are my strongest points.*
2. G Money 970 says:

   February 18, 2010 at 6:41 am

   Boats and Hoes
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3. Rachel F says:

   February 18, 2010 at 6:43 am

   Personally, it was ok. But how amazingly she got better confused me. It could be REALLY good if you stretched it out longer. Made it slow more. Your good at showing how the character feels, but you need show what’s going on more than focusing on how they feel about it. It’s like telling someone about your fight with your friend. If you keep talking about how you feel about it. They wont know what happened and not want to listen. Does that make since?
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4. Luisa B says:

   February 18, 2010 at 6:45 am

   Separate your paragraphs a little more. Good story, so sad… Titles? Hmmm, how about: ~Live Your Life (it’s on the radio at the moment…) ~A Saved Slip ~Almost Falling ~Love Saved Death
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5. Susannah C says:

   February 18, 2010 at 6:47 am

   Ha ha. Sorry, that was a bad answer. Try picking something metaphorical from the text. I didn’t read much of it. The ‘clink clink clink’ turned me off. But I’ve never much liked onomatopoeia.
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6. Madiiiieeeee says:

   February 18, 2010 at 6:49 am

   I love the begining but it gets a little confusing in the middle, not like a confusing kind of way-but in that way where you change your way of writing, keep the begining change the middle a little bit. Also the end is a bit odd, I think you should rephrase it diffrently.

   The title should be something with the idea of he story;
   no one likes boring titles-use a creative one with a cool idea;
   like a certain idea in the story.
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7. i guess?? says:

   February 18, 2010 at 6:51 am

   nice writing

   maby um like "the great brandy scare"? sorry i kinda got that from the story title "the great gracie chase" lol sorry im not feeling very creative right now…
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